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Guest Blogger: Jodie Renner: POV 103: Deep Point of View or Close Third

26 May

As I discussed in POV 101, in order to draw the reader in and grab her emotionally, every story needs to have a clearly dominant viewpoint character. We should meet that viewpoint character right away, preferably in the first paragraph, and the first chapter should be entirely from her point of view, so the reader knows whose story it is and can start bonding with her and rooting for her. When we see the story through her eyes, reacting as she does to her problems, it sucks us into the story and we want to keep reading to find out what happens to her.

 

 

In POV 102, I gave some tips for avoiding “head-hopping.”If we stick mainly with our protagonist, in his head and heart, with a bare minimum or no stepping back to describe things from the author’s stance (omniscient POV), we’re using deep point of view, or close third, which is a lot like first-person point of view, with the added freedom of switching to the villain’s or some other character’s POV when it suits our purpose. Deep POV is a powerful way of drawing your readers into your story quickly and making them worry about your hero right away, and keep worrying – which is exactly what you want!

 

But how do you go about this? Let’s suppose you’re writing a story about a macho, hero-type guy named Kurt, who defeats the villain, restores justice, and even gets the girl. It’s Kurt’s story so he’s your main viewpoint character. How do you make sure your handling of his viewpoint is as powerful as it can possibly be?

 

The first thing you need to do is imagine the setting, people and events as they would be perceived by Kurt, and only by him. As you write the story, you the writer must become Kurt. You see what he sees, and nothing more. You know what he knows, and nothing more. When Kurt walks into a bar, for example, you do not imagine how the bar looks from some god-like authorial stance high above, or as a movie camera might see it; you see it only as Kurt sees it, walking in purposefully and looking around.

 

And of course include his reactions to the other people in the bar. Show Kurt’s feelings (and only his) about what and who he’s seeing, and his reactions to the situation. Instead of saying, “The bar was noisy, dark and smoky,” say “The cigarette smoke in the air stung Kurt’s eyes and, in the dim light, he couldn’t make out if his target was there. As he looked around, the room started to quieten down. Heads turned, and eyes took him in, some curious, some hostile.” This way, the reader is seeing the scene through Kurt’s head and identifying with him, starting to worry about him. This from-the-inside-out approach is vital if you want your reader to care about your protagonist and get truly engaged in your story.

 

But you need to go even further – you need to describe what he’s seeing and feeling by using words and expressions that he would normally use. If your character is a rancher or a drifter or a hard-boiled P.I, you’re not going to describe the scene or his reactions in highly educated, articulate, flowery terms, or tell about things he probably wouldn’t notice, like the color-coordination of the décor, the chandeliers, or the arrangement of dried flowers in an urn on the floor.

 

It’s also important to be vigilant that your viewpoint doesn’t slip, so you’re suddenly giving someone else’s opinion about Kurt, or telling about something that’s happening out in the street or even in a hidden corner of the bar, while Kurt is still at the entrance of the bar. You can let the reader know other people’s reactions to Kurt, not by going into their heads at this point, but by what Kurt perceives—he sees their disapproving, admiring, angry, curious, or intense looks, picks up on their body language, hears their words and tone of voice, etc.

 

Then, in a later scene or chapter, you can go into the bad guy’s point of view and find out what he thinks of Kurt. Or, once he meets the girl, write a scene or chapter in her viewpoint so the reader finds out more about her and what she thinks of our hero Kurt.

 

This technique, properly used, will suck your readers effectively into your story world, where they really want to be, engaged, involved, and connected.

 
© Jodie Renner, www.JodieRennerEditing, April 2012

 
See also: “Show Your Setting Through Your POV Character’s Eyes” – http://www.bloodredpencil.blogspot.ca/2012/04/show-your-setting-through-pov.html

 
Jodie Renner is a freelance fiction editor who specializes in suspense/thrillers, mysteries and other crime fiction, as well as YA, historical and mainstream. Jodie’s craft-of-fiction articles appear regularly here and on 5 other blogs. For more info on Jodie’s editing services and for links to more of her posts, please visit www.JodieRennerEditing.com.

 
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Posted by on May 26, 2012 in Guest Blogger, Writing

 

11 responses to “Guest Blogger: Jodie Renner: POV 103: Deep Point of View or Close Third

  1. Jodie Renner

    May 26, 2012 at 12:43 pm

    Thanks for running my three articles on point of view in fiction, Doug! Maybe you or the readers can suggest some further craft-of-fiction topics you’d like me to research and write about?

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  2. Teresa Reasor

    May 26, 2012 at 3:31 pm

    Jodie:
    I am really enjoying your posts and have found them very informative. I love Deep Point of View as a reader and a writer. Suzanne Brockmann is a master at this. I’m attempting to become one. I’m sharing these blogs.
    Thanks so much,
    Teresa Reasor

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  3. Jodie Renner

    May 26, 2012 at 4:45 pm

    Thanks for your kind words, Teresa. Deep Point of View is such a powerful tool for sucking the readers quickly into the head and heart of your protagonist, so they bond with him/her right away and start worrying and turning the pages.

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  4. Sybil Bates McCormack

    May 26, 2012 at 4:52 pm

    Loved the post, Jodie. Unfortunately, I’ve discovered that this technique is much harder than it looks. LOL! That said, I do appreciate the difference it’s making in what I produce. Thanks for the advice. (I value your blog, Dr. Lyle!)

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  5. Jodie Renner

    May 26, 2012 at 6:39 pm

    Thanks for dropping by and leaving a comment, Sybil. I find this concept to be one of the most difficult for my clients to master. Try the colored highlighters I suggested in Part II – one highlighter for each character, but use them only when we’re in the head of that character, privy to their thoughts and inner feelings, or they’re doing something out of the vision and hearing of the POV character. If they’re the POV character for that scene, no problem. If they’re not, they’re poaching!

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  6. Nancy M. Griffis

    May 27, 2012 at 4:58 pm

    Reblogged this on Nancy M. Griffis.

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  7. Beverly Purdy

    May 28, 2012 at 6:03 am

    POV is very important, and can be especially challenging in the opening pages when you are trying to “draw your readers into your story quickly and make them worry about your hero right away, and keep worrying” since there are so many other tasks to accomplish– such as establishing the who, what, where and when, of the story! These articles give great tips and insights into the process. Thanks Jodie! And thank you for posting them Doug!

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    • Jodie Renner

      May 28, 2012 at 9:47 am

      Thanks for dropping by and commenting, Beverly. I’m glad you find me articles useful!

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  8. Jodie Renner

    May 28, 2012 at 6:54 am

    Thanks for reblogging, Nancy!

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  9. schillingklaus

    April 7, 2016 at 7:12 am

    I thoroughly abhor anf avoid Deep PoV. Editorial omniscient narrator is my true way to go, regardless of any propaganda by editors, publishers, and vulgar readers.

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